Fast Fiction and Avoiding AI

Recently Bona Books posted a discussion of how they unwittingly bought an AI-generated story for an anthology — more than one, actually, but one of them from the (now infamous) scammer Bella Chacha.

There is understandably a lot of distress right now in publishing over how to catch these things and how to deal with them. In reading Bona Books’ post, though, I found myself thinking about an angle I’ve not seen discussed much at all.

Well before AI became a problem, there were conversations about the “fast fashion” mentality manifesting in publishing: flimsy products with very little staying power, but produced quickly to capitalize on the trend of the moment. Amazon’s algorithms bear a fair bit of responsibility for this; they have always tended to increase visibility for those who put out work on a quick schedule, so if you’re self-published and want to succeed, one of the ways to improve your odds is to write and release very very fast. But of course, if you’re operating on that kind of treadmill, you don’t have a lot of time to develop depth and richness in your writing — you may not even have time to copy-edit! — so this pushes the ecosystem toward authors churning out endless iterations of simple tropes, and never mind whether there’s much of a there there. It’s not all self-published authors, naturally, but the selection pressure is there. And meanwhile, you get books taking the online world by storm where even the people recommending them are laughing about what hot messes they are, but the vibes.

Now, before I thoroughly cement my curmudgeon cred here, I should note that this is hardly a brand-new phenomenon. Dime novels were similarly cheap, quickly produced, and intended to cater to trends; so long as they delivered exciting tropes, it didn’t much matter if their prose was rough, their plots full of holes, their characterization non-existent. But dime novels didn’t have to contend with AI.

With AI, you can mass-produce this type of thing vastly quicker than any human being can hope to do. AI has been trained on all those tropes and can spit out more or less competent prose in industrial quantities. What it can’t do very well is the big-picture stuff, because that requires you to have an actual thinking brain that can make decisions about how all the smaller bits fit together. AI just takes one step after another until it reaches the end of what it’s been told to do.

So now I want to loop back to that Bona Books post. Let me pull out two specific quotes about the Bella Chacha story:

It hit our brief with a perfect intensity that felt difficult to resist. A queer woman, building a machine from scrap metal and rage to destroy her colonial oppressors? Of course we loved it.

and

The closer we examined that first draft, the more the story’s centre seemed absent. The protagonist was active, but lacked interiority. The worldbuilding had colourful details that somehow failed to build consistently. Certain hallmark sentences recurred over and over (“Not X, but Y…”). And the pacing was off, with important story beats given oddly little narrative weight.

Most of the discussions around catching AI-generated stories, and (to the best of my knowledge) all of the detection programs, have focused on prose-level markers: overuse of em-dashes, overuse of the “rule of three,” vague generalities, and so forth. One of those shows up here — the “not X, but Y” example — but most of the red flags the editors found on a re-read are issues of fundamental storycraft. Exactly the kinds of points you might hear raised in a critique group, where readers are primed to look for the flaws.

So why did Bona Books initially think the story was good enough to buy? I can’t speak for the editors, but based on their own statement, it sounds like the concept and vibes carried them away. Those were so shiny, people didn’t see beneath the surface to the gaps and weaknesses below.

And that’s why I’m thinking about “fast fiction” today, and how it relates to AI. Even before ChatGPT hit the scene, Amazon’s algorithms were training a lot of readers to accept fiction that prioritizes concept and vibes over skill in execution. The two aren’t incompatible; in fact, a story that mashes all the id buttons with solid craft to back it up is amazing! But treating the latter as an optional side bonus creates a situation where, sure, why not have AI write your stories? The characterization and worldbuilding and pacing of the plot aren’t important anyway.

I am, of course, not an editor. (I have entertained thoughts of it from time to time. I currently have no time and also, quite frankly, am not sure my sanity could survive the ongoing hurricane.) But so many people out there want to be able to just pop some text into an AI checker — which itself often runs on AI! — and get an answer back on the spot. Yet we have a thousand examples of those programs giving both false positives and false negatives, while often feeding the same industry that’s causing the problem in the first place.

(I’m pretty sure “create a problem and then sell the solution” is the tactic used by any number of villains in thrillers and superhero fiction . . .)

What we don’t have — not that I’ve seen anyway — is more conversation about using your actual human brain to look, not at the prose, but at the narrative craft of the piece. I would absolutely not advocate for using that to accuse people of deploying AI; at this level, a bot-generated piece is indistinguishable from a writer who’s simply not very good yet. But if we ask more of our fiction than just emotional intensity and some shiny bits sprinkled on top, we might do more to weed out AI-generated stories than any amount of running them through POS checkers like Pangram.

Now you may ask, can’t somebody generate an AI story and then revise it to have good craft? In theory, yes. In practice, there are two hurdles in the way of that. The first is that, if you aren’t in the habit of actually writing the fiction yourself, then you’re unlikely to be great at fixing it, either. It’s like letting a robot pile up a bunch of heavy objects for you, and then trying to rearrange them into a nice shape with the muscles you didn’t build by collecting them in the first place. And the second is that — based on what I’ve heard from freelancers hired to “clean up” AI-generated text for companies — the cleanup process is often more obnoxious and more labor-intensive than it would have been to just write the damn thing themselves.

But sure, somebody might do it. Probably already has done it. I have issues with that person, because I have issues with AI that go well beyond the fact that it’s bad at storycraft, but right now I’m focused on a different battle. I’m looking at Bona Books’ statement and wondering why a story with such fundamental flaws seemed good enough to accept in the first place. (Especially since, by their own admission, “Bella Chacha’s” revisions didn’t address those flaws at all.) I’m feeling empathy for the writers in their slush pile whose works maybe weren’t as flashy on a first look, but had more substance under the hood. I would rather have seen them given a chance.

We deserve stories that fire on all cylinders, not just the brightest and loudest.

Happy book day to The Eye of Leviathan!

My latest M.A. Carrick collaboration with Alyc Helms is out today! Retailer links for all formats are on our site . . .

cover art for The Eye of Leviathan by M.A. Carrick, showing a half-circle of a green-tinged map of the Otherworld above a half-circle of an engraving of a sea beast. The intervening space is filled with gold filigree, and joined by a blood-red wax seal with a ship sailing between tall cliffs toward a starry sky, with tentacles in the waves below.

In an alternate Spanish Golden Age, where the map becomes the territory and mapmakers are the architects of reality, the Council of the Sea Beyond has risen to unrivaled power, exploiting the world’s most precious resources for their own gain.

Determined to discover how cosmographers pin down the islands of the Otherworld, Estevan seeks power with the Council of the Sea Beyond – but he risks the exposure of his own secrets, too. For he is a changeling, a faerie masquerading as a mortal. And for a faerie to enter the mortal world like that, a child must go the other way . . .

The Hungry Girl, the nameless human daughter whose place he took, has grown up opposite her “brother.” Lost among the fae and desperate to find some purpose for her existence, she leaps at the chance to help a group of Spanish explorers in the Sea Beyond . . . only to be horrified at the atrocities they commit.

Soon the unlikely siblings will need to overcome their rivalry — because only together can they bring down Spain’s worlds-spanning empire and save the homes they have come to love.

Amishi P. Jha’s Peak Mind

This is a piece of July reading, but I’m pulling it out from the usual booklog (which will come in August) both because I have more than usual to say about it, and because in this case, there’s good reason to mention it before next month.

What this book is: a very cogent discussion by a neuroscientist specializing in the study of attention — and, as knock-on effects from that, memory, emotional regulation, connection with other people, and so forth. She talks about how we focus (and what disrupts that), how we stay aware of our environment (physical, emotional, etc.), how this relates to working/short-term memory and what goes into long-term memory, why we get disrupted by negative memories or worries about the future, how to keep from being hijacked by emotional responses, how to really be present for our interactions with people around us . . . and how basically all of these things can be improved through mindfulness practice.

Which is kind of a buzzword these days, but not without reason. Jha is very explicit that mindfulness is not about “thinking happy thoughts” (that’s actually counter-productive a lot of the time, as it burns the mental resources you need for actual coping), nor is it something whose purpose is to make you feel better. In fact, the early road there often sucks! Instead, she treats it as mental training, the way you might undertake physical training for your body. The aim is to have better control of your focus — not so you can be focused all the time, but so you can switch as needed between that and broader contextual awareness — and a meta-awareness of what your own mind is doing, which gives you the chance to intervene when what it’s doing is uhhhh not so great.

(As a sidebar, this book is also the first time I’ve encountered the word “hypertasking.” It refers to tetrising your time so that you’re always focused on something and never give yourself downtime between tasks, and, uh. Hi. Yeah. That’s me. Turns out that whole “I don’t know how to turn off” thing is also part of this same cluster of concepts, and while it has its benefits, in the long run it’s not really good for your brain.)

A few caveats: first, a good chunk of the research Jha has done, and therefore presumably a chunk of her funding, involves the U.S. military. I found that I was not as bothered by that as I expected, because frankly, her work is ultimately about helping them not do the kind of thing I want them to not do. For example, she talks about how we need to be aware of our own mental narratives so that we can see how they’re influencing our attention and know when to let go of them: for example, if you have the mental narrative of “anybody around me could be a terrorist,” then you are automatically going to notice things that fit your narrative and literally not see the ones that signal “actually, this is a harmless civilian.” (If you’ve ever heard of the basketball/gorilla experiment, it’s very much in line with that.) I’m honestly in favor of anybody working against the “assume anybody could be an enemy and react accordingly” mindset.

Second, though she touches briefly on ADHD, she is not specifically a researcher in that field. So, for example, she comments that using mindfulness training to build awareness of mind-wandering abates the “costs” of mind-wandering in people with ADHD, but she doesn’t address the challenges in undertaking that training in the first place. That’s the kind of thing that would probably benefit from reading a different book, one written by someone specialized in the relevant sub-field — or, of course, direct therapeutic guidance. (She is very very clear that while mindfulness plays a key role in certain treatments for a variety of conditions, including both ADHD and PTSD, reading her book is 1000% not a substitute for actual therapy, and please do not use it as such.)

Those caveats laid aside, I found this lucid, well-argued, and convincing. I’ve gone through spates of doing mindfulness meditation before, and they were fine, but I never found them life-changing. Turns out that might be because I was almost always doing only five or ten minutes, and so far, the research suggests that — for whatever reason — twelve minutes is the minimum effective “dose.” (More is better, but since telling people to meditate for thirty minutes tends to result in them doing it for zero, she is very pragmatically aiming at the minimum line.) Twelve minutes a day, at least five days a week, for at least four weeks, to produce measurable changes in people’s performance in various cognitive tests . . . though of course it’s not like you do that and then stop, any more than you get swole at the gym and then quit on the assumption those muscles will stay with you forever. But theoretically, after four weeks of following this regimen, you’ve done enough mental lifting to notice a change.

And that’s why I’m posting this now. As of it going live, I have successfully meditated for eight days straight, twelve minutes each time. By saying that publicly, I’m giving myself a bit more accountability — because my hope is that I’ll be able to keep this up, and in August I’ll come back to report on how it’s going. Will I feel less scattershot? Better able to remember things? More skilled, not only at focusing on what’s in front of me, but knowing how to stop focusing and just &#$! chill for a bit?

Only one way to find out!

New Worlds: Climate Change

Climate change is on everyone’s mind’s lately, to the point where “climate fiction” is now a recognized subgenre — both within speculative fiction and without. Given my focus in this Patreon, however, I’m not going to attempt to spin scenarios about what our world might realistically look like in fifty or a hundred years, or how we’re going to respond to it; other people have already done that in far greater depth, with far greater knowledge of the subject, than I could hope to do.

Instead, we’re going to take a look at the climate changes humanity has already experienced, and what we’ve done about them.

Broadly speaking, we can lump these into two major categories: changes in precipitation, and changes in temperature. Furthermore, we can specify that, for it to count as “climate change” in a meaningful sense, it has to be a lasting alteration, not a brief one. Short-term change is weather; long-term trends are climate. And only the latter drives significant adaptations from society.

Of those two categories — please forgive the incoming pun — temperature tends to sneak under the radar. As we’re in the process of finding out, you can get significant alterations in weather patterns from global shifts of only a degree or two; in the days when no one had reliable thermometers marked with a systematic scale, that kind of shift was impossible to measure. And a gradual, large-scale drift like the one that produced the eras we term the Medieval Warm Period or the Little Ice Age happens on a timeline so slow, people are apt to notice it only across the generations: maybe your grandfather tells stories about how frost never used to strike after the spring equinox, or conversely, the ground had always thawed by then.

These changes are still significant! Agriculture depends on people knowing when it’s safe to put crops in the ground, and having enough time for them to mature before autumn storms or winter freezes kill them. As the average temperatures drift from what they used to be, harvests get poorer, because local customs are adapted to the weather patterns everyone expects. But as those patterns break, people will gradually change their customs to match, growing crops better suited to the conditions that now prevail.

Changes in precipitation can be a lot more calamitous. In this historical record, we most often hear about this as an issue of drought, when a persistent lack of rainfall across multiple years results in famine. It’s also possible, however, for the problem to go the other way; too much rainfall leads to flooding and crops drowning in the field. Or, in a worst case scenario, you get both: current theories hold that the decline of the Khmer Empire owed a lot to unpredictable shifts between not enough rain and far too much, which wrecked the stability of a society that depended upon sophisticated hydroengineering.

People can also adapt to changes in rainfall, of course, but it’s more difficult because the effects are more sudden. While unusual heat or frost can kill crops, a slow upward or downward drift in average temperatures gives you time to change from wheat to barley or vice versa, as you plant something hardier for the conditions. Droughts and flooding arrive more abruptly, and in between instances, you get good years where it seems like everything is back to normal. It’s only when you look back on the pattern that you can see where things started going downhill — and by then, quite a lot of people may have starved.

Attempts to engineer our way out of trouble are not a new phenomenon. The aforementioned hydraulic works, discussed in more detail last year, are all about trying to buffer against the vagaries of water being over- or under-supplied. Farmers can also insulate their fields with straw or attempt to shade them with taller plants, to mitigate the effects of heat and cold and reduce evaporation. But mostly, the response to this has had to take the form of changing our own behavior: planting something more tolerant of the conditions at hand, so that at the end of the day — or the season — we have something to eat.

I’ve been speaking of this primarily in terms of crops because that has been the overwhelming consideration — and also the only part even vaguely in human control. If climate shifts produce more hurricanes or tornadoes or blizzards . . . well, historically speaking, there is bugger-all people have been able to do about it. Even now, we can only do so much to fortify our houses and cities against those kinds of storms. And while it’s true that climate change can also introduce novel diseases, neither the people of the time nor historians looking back now can generally tell where exactly those epidemics came from. All people could do was hunker down and hope to survive, or migrate somewhere they hoped would be safer.

Because climate has historically been every bit as much out of our control as weather. While it’s true that human action can affect the globe, as we’re seeing right now, it tends to require a scale of influence we really only hit with the Industrial Revolution. Before that, our population was too small, our output of climate-changing factors too restricted. We have changed local climates through actions like deforestation, which can lead to desertification, but the biggest alterations have mostly come about through natural forces: volcanic eruptions, changes in ocean circulation, and the like.

I should note in passing a particular subset of (thus far fictional) climate change, which is the process of terraforming. Science fiction has long played with the idea that humans could deliberately alter the climate of a whole planet specifically to make it hospitable — and not just the climate, but the entire composition of the atmosphere and the biomes of the land and sea. Most novels have handwaved their effects into existence, caring more about it as a background device to allow for human settlement on other planets; only a few have really devoted attention to the mechanisms by which this might be achieved. If you’re interested in that end of things, I am definitely not qualified to help you! But it’s an intriguing question to explore — not least because the precursors to such ideas are being explored right now on our own planet.

Back to the home front: bear in mind that, more than any given set of conditions, the problem tends to be change. Some conditions are, admittedly, more favorable than others; mild temperatures and moderate rain — however those are defined for the region — are going to produce better results than the alternative. But humans are very good at adapting to the situation at hand, and thriving as much as possible under those circumstances.

It’s when the rug gets pulled out from under us that havoc truly results. Then the behaviors and patterns that protected us before suddenly become maladaptive. Even if the new situation is entirely survivable, we may not be acting in the best fashion to get through it. But figuring that out, and making the necessary changes, is easier said than done . . . and no, that isn’t simply a not-very-coded slam against all the inertia getting in the way of responding to our current climate crisis. People cannot easily abandon cities threatened by rising sea levels or the depletion of the local aquifer, or pivot their economy toward resources that better suit the new reality. That’s especially true of everyone at the bottom of the socioeconomic scale, for whom the immediate concern has to be their ability to get by today.

As I said above, these changes are mostly going to play out on a timescale that means we only see a snapshot of one moment along the line — or, perhaps, look back upon it in retrospect. (A few authors will have their story elapse over generations or centuries, but that’s not common.) Still, knowing that context can help set the stage for a plot . . . one with far too much relevance for us today.

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Books read, June 2026

The Tricky Business of Faerie Bargains, Reena McCarty. Something about the marketing of this one — the cover art, the cover copy, and so forth — made me think it’s a cozy novel. It absolutely is not. Which isn’t to say it’s grimdark, because it isn’t that, either; just that the stakes here are higher than cozy reaches for, and the trials the characters go through have sharper edges.

Which for me was a good thing, because I was extremely uncertain if I was going to like a cozy book about the fae. (That tips over into twee with shocking ease.) So I was very pleased to instead get a novel in a world where fae have always been known to exist, but Europe has largely — and deliberately — destroyed its own Otherworld, while the U.S. has set up strict laws governing how people are and are not permitted to make deals with the fae. The faerie courts are not the familiar Seelie and Unseelie, but they absolutely have their own politics, which unsurprisingly turn out to underlie the small-scale disaster the protagonist is trying to set right.

The fae themselves are pleasingly alien (even if I find the human-sounding ones like “Sloan” rather distracting). There’s just enough echo of dysfunctional human patterns like narcissism to keep their weirdness from feeling random, and McCarty does a good job of selling the idea that the fae simply do not have the same priorities and mentalities as mortals do. The ending was particularly effective in that regard!

Below the Root, Zilpha Keatley Snyder. Discussed elsewhere.

The Murderer’s Tale, Margaret Frazer. I continue to gravitate toward shorter books at the moment, which is probably contributing to how many mysteries I’ve been reading lately.

By this point in the series, it is well established that the first scene will be from the viewpoint of the title character. So when you name your book The Murderer’s Tale . . . yeah, Frazer is not faking you out. From the start, you know who the killer will be, and you can very rapidly guess who the victim will be, too. The killer is an unpleasant piece of work, thoroughly convinced of his own superior significance and misreading the motivations of everybody around him, who of course are lesser. Though I thought it was a deft touch when you see him being judgmental toward certain characters, and then soon after that you’re in Frevisse’s perspective and seeing her be judgmental toward them, too. Class distinctions are very real to these people. But this one really does read like a tragedy, because you see what’s coming, it shouldn’t happen, and of course you can’t stop it.

A Case of Mice and Murder, Sally Smith. A newer mystery, set in 1901 London, about a barrister of the Inner Temple very comfortably settled into his routine, who gets piked out of it because the Lord Chief Justice has been murdered — within the Temple! — and the guy in charge of the place is extremely motivated to get the case solved as discreetly as possible. I very much like the central conceit here, which hinges on the fact that the Inner Temple’s governance means the City of London police can only intervene there if asked; since the Temple is very much an elite bastion of the sort that thinks scandal is the kind of thing that should only happen to other people, having an insider investigate is exactly how such men would handle even a murder.

And Gabriel Ward is a congenial detective, very nerdy and obsessed not only with the law but with a whole array of historical tidbits. I like how Smith handles his very obvious OCD: another book might have made more emotional hay out of the stress and pressure of the condition, but Gabriel has long since arranged his life in ways that accommodate it. He does, over time, become more aware of the restrictions it places on him, but since he’s a well-off gentleman cushioned by his residence in the Temple, it is not really a source of angst. It’s just how his life works.

I enjoyed this one enough that I started out listening to it in audiobook and then transferred to ebook, not because the narrator was bad — I liked him, despite fluctuating volume levels that sometimes made the quiet bits difficult to hear — but because I have approximately 1-2 hours of audiobook listening time in a given week, and I didn’t want to wait that long to get the whole story!

Cinder House, Freya Marske. This is the point at which I pivoted to reading the Hugo-nominated short fiction categories. I also read the short stories and novelettes this month, but since those weren’t published under separate cover, they don’t get tracked here.

It takes a fair bit of effort to make a Cinderella retelling feel original, but Marske manages it well — starting with the fact that the protagonist gets murdered at the start of the novella and spends the rest of it as a ghost haunting the house now held by her stepmother and stepsisters. Marske also adds in a fresh layer by giving the prince his own story, with a curse that belongs nowhere in the original while fitting well into the general shape of fairy tale tropes. Be warned that there’s some fairly heinous abuse here, quite apart from the murder; it turns out there are ways to torture a ghost who is more or less coterminous with the house she haunts, and one of the stepsisters eagerly explores those. The ending, however, finds a lovely and unusual resolution for the core problems.

Murder by Memory, Olivia Waite. SFnal murder mystery in space, aboard a vessel that’s not so much a generation ship as a reincarnational one: people regularly save their memories to data “books” and upload the contents to their new body after their old one dies. The crux here is that someone has been murdered at the same time that several books were destroyed, with many complications ensuing.

I do tend to engage less with SF titles, but given the mystery kick I’m on right now, this one fit right in with my current mood. I enjoyed it a lot, even if I’m not sure it stands out in a way that would make me say it’s award-worthy. There’s another one out in the series and a third one on the way; I may well hunt them out.

Automatic Noodle, Annalee Newitz. Also SF, this time firmly in the cozy corner. In the aftermath of a war that saw California win independence from the United States, robots have their freedom . . . sort of. They’re still discriminated against in a number of ways, many of which pose problems for a group of bots who want to open a restaurant.

I am extremely hit or miss with cozy books, because sometimes the warm fuzziness winds up making the perils feel a bit too toothless for my taste. Here, Staybehind lists at the outset several things that could go badly wrong, and then almost none of them happen. I suspect that actually dealing with those would have required this to be a novel, not a novella, and also it would have been markedly less cozy.

The River Has Roots, Amal El-Mohtar. This, on the other hand, is so firmly up my alley that I might as well have painted a target on myself. Folkloric-mood novella based on a murder ballad, with a central motif that plays off the connections between language and magic? YES PLEASE. And the writing is a lyrical (without being overwrought) as usual. If Amal wants to write another six of these, all riffing on different ballads, I will be first in line for them.

And All Between, Zilpha Keatley Snyder. Discussed elsewhere.

The Summer War, Naomi Novik. Last of the novellas, and I’m a little puzzled: in the Hugo packet it gets labeled as a “sample,” and there’s a link to request the whole thing on Netgalley. I wasn’t minded to create an account just to do that, so I figured I would read what’s here . . . and it feels like it’s all but maybe the last two pages? Anybody who’s read the full thing, I’d love to know how much the sample cuts off.

Anyway, I was feeling jaundiced because of that whole “sample” business, but this won me over. There’s a tenuous peace between Faerie and the mortal world, but given the way faerie memory works, that means almost nothing: the events that set off the original war are as fresh today as the day they happened. The main character winds up in the thick of that, of course, and has to figure out how to protag from within very constrained circumstances.

The pacing of this one did feel a little odd to me, in that it spends a lot of time on setting the stage before we get to the main act. In ways I understand — without that setup, much of the resolution would be less satisfying — but it took me a bit longer to get into it as a result.

Until the Celebration, Zilpha Keatley Snyder. Discussed elsewhere.

A Case of Life and Limb, Sally Smith. Second of the Gabriel Ward mysteries, and the last for now, though there’s a third coming next year. While eventually you get a murder here, much of the novel concerns someone sending packages with desiccated body parts to an assortment of men in the Inner Temple. (There’s an entertaining discussion about whether this is even a crime, under the laws of the era.) Gabriel is once again tasked to investigate lest — oh, the horror — the journalists of Fleet Street find out and splash it all over their papers.

I should note that each book also involves some trial Gabriel is involved in, with the investigation taking away from the precious time he needs to prepare for that. I like that his trials are not murder trials; the first concerns a very tangled question of intellectual property rights around a beloved children’s book, and this one concerns a defamation case brought by a popular stage entertainer. Topsy Tillotson is a delightful character, and I like how getting involved in her situation causes the rather mousy Gabriel to grow some unexpected teeth. (In my head he is played by Eddie Marsan, specifically channeling Mr. Norrell, sans that character’s less admirable qualities.)

One other note I want to make, though, I’ll put behind rot-13 — not because it’s directly spoilery, but because it might prejudice a reader’s thoughts in spoilery directions: Gur jnl gung Tnoevry’f pheerag pnfr unf gb or gvrq va fbzrubj jvgu gur pevzr jvaqf hc aneebjvat gur svryq bs aneengvir cbffvovyvgvrf snveyl funecyl. Bs pbhefr vg jbhyq srry n yvggyr enaqbz vs vg jrera’g pbaarpgrq, ohg abarguryrff, gur aneebjvat fyvtugyl qvfncbvagf zr.

The Writer’s Little Book of Platitudes returns!

Following on last month’s re-release of The Writer’s Little Book of Naming, The Writer’s Little Book of Platitudes is back out in the world!

A white background with the text "The Writer's Little Book of Platitudes: Tips and Tricks for Taking (and Ignoring) Advice," by Marie Brennan, author of the Memoirs of Lady Trent. In the center is a red circle with a diagonal line through it (the symbol for "no") with the words "thou shalt not" inside.

“Show, don’t tell.” “Murder your darlings.” “Write every day.”

Certain pieces of advice are widespread in the writing community — but what do they really mean? And are they nuggets of universal wisdom, or do they only apply to some writers in some circumstances? Award-winning author Marie Brennan tackles these old saws, dissecting each one to see what purpose it might serve . . . and when you should toss it aside.

And starting next month, there will be a brand-new Writer’s Little Book — stay tuned for news on that . . .

New Worlds: How’s the Weather?

Weather tends to show up in novels merely as a background detail — all too often as an example of the pathetic fallacy, where e.g. it’s raining because the protagonist is sad. Every so often, it rises to the level of plot device: there’s a snowstorm so characters can get snowed in somewhere. Speculative fiction honestly has a dearth of weather worked into the general description of a scene, despite the fact that any time the story moves outside, there must be some kind of weather in play.

But if that were all, I wouldn’t be devoting an essay to this subject. After all, this Patreon is about worldbuilding, which means not just the physical but the cultural side of a setting. (Given my inclinations, the cultural side more than anything else). So how is weather itself a part of society?

Depending on where you live, you already know some of the answers to that. Weather shapes our houses, our clothing, and our food, in ways discussed in previous essays. It also gives a rhythm to our lives: if you live in a region where afternoon thunderstorms are expected in the summer, or the monsoon blows through at certain times of year, that affects what activities people undertake at what times. But there are other, more directly weather-focused elements, too.

Let’s start with a question we tend to take for granted nowadays: can you see the weather coming?

Weather forecasting as a formal science got started in the nineteenth century, and it began with us more rigorously measuring what the weather even was. You can’t do much in the way of prediction unless you have a mass of data about highs, lows, wind speed and direction, pressure changes, precipitation, and so on. And you need that data to be spread over a large area, because of course weather is never purely a local phenomenon! This included giving scientific instruments to ship captains, since the ocean is a key driver of weather . . . and also the safety of those captains can depend on knowing what the weather is about to do.

Fast communication is key, too. If you hear that an area upwind of you is getting a cold snap or a storm front, odds are good that’s headed your way shortly. What really sets forecasting going, though, is computers — which can crunch huge amounts of data vastly quicker than humans can — and weather balloons and satellites to measure conditions from above. Thanks to those things, especially improved computer modeling, the precision of our forecasts has improved astonishingly: these days, the prediction for four days from now is as accurate as the prediction for tomorrow was thirty years ago.

Of course, people have been trying to predict the weather for a lot longer than we’ve had computers, or even thermometers. This has largely been short-term and based on observations of immediate phenomena: for example, “red sky at night, sailor’s delight; red sky in the morning, sailor’s warning” is accurate for regions where weather tends to move from west to east, as the tint of the sky signals the location of a high-pressure (good weather) system and whether it’s headed toward you or moving away. Or, where I grew up — at the tail end of Tornado Alley — we all learned that a certain greenish cast to the sky meant the weather was ripe for forming twisters.

The thing about that green sky is, it does mean a likelihood of severe weather . . . but not necessarily tornadoes. And that’s the flaw of this kind of weather lore, that it can be inconsistent, or outright incorrect. That whole North American tradition of Groundhog Day, where the presence or absence of shadows seen by a groundhog predicts how much longer the winter will last? It has absolutely no statistical underpinning. Some analyses even give it a negative correlation, showing that Punxsutawney Phil’s predictions are less accurate than random chance! Maybe we need to update our proverb.

But humans are not content merely to know what the weather is likely to do an hour or a day from now. We would really, really love to control it, to suit our own purposes.

And for millennia, people have been promising the ability to do exactly that. This is honestly one of the underpinnings of certain elements of religion: you pray or make offerings to a deity of the sky or agriculture in the hopes of getting the rain or sun necessary for a good crop, or a deity of the sky or sea to get the wind you need for your ocean voyage. Humans can’t control the weather, but gods can, so you ask them nicely for their help. Colloquially, we often call society-wide weather rituals “rain dances,” and dancing is indeed a common element, though not a universal one.

Rainmakers, however, peddle claims of a more direct skill. They assert that they, on their own, can end a drought — or, less commonly, end a deluge that’s causing flooding or drowning the crops. Historically, they attributed their power to magic; in the nineteenth and twentieth centuries, they instead dressed their assertions up in scientific trappings. Charles Hatfield, one famous American rainmaker, used a secret mix of chemicals in evaporating tanks to “attract” rain to an area. His apparent success rate (likely due to him being a good weather predictor, rather than weather-worker) was high enough that he was able to charge the City of San Diego ten thousand dollars — in early 1900s money! — to fill their empty reservoir.

Which promptly backfired on him, as the region experienced torrential rains that broke a dam, killed about twenty people, and caused an estimated $3.5 million in damage. Rainmakers who promised results they failed to deliver could and did get sued for fraud, but rainmakers who “succeeded” too well could also wind up in trouble.

This idea has not gone away. If anything, it’s trying to accelerate into the realm of actual, reliable science. We’ve been conducting experiments in cloud seeding for decades, aiming to encourage rain or snow through scattering material in the atmosphere. Its efficacy is debatable, and people have understandable concerns about the environmental impact of the material used. Other, newer concepts involve things like reflecting some of the sun’s energy back out into space, to slow the effects of global warming.

Science fiction can take these ideas to an extreme. Especially in closed environments like biomes, stories may depict weather as scheduled down to the minute, so characters know to expect a quarter-inch of rain between 3:17 and 4:01 p.m. That’s plausible when the “rain” is actually coming out of ceiling pipes; when it’s the product of natural planetary forces, it’s much more of a stretch. At that point, you’re more in the realm of fantasy, where a sorcerer can summon a storm on demand . . . which would probably have a lot more society-wide effects, especially in military contexts, than most novels take the time to imagine.

With the rise of climate fiction as a subgenre, though, we might expect to see a lot more weather control showing up in our stories. And so, with an eye toward that, next week we’ll take a look at climate change!

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New story, new poem!

July brings with it two new publications! In Flash Point SF (and free to read online) is “How to Get a Head,” a little tale of how to deal with a tsurube otoshi — a giant head out of Japanese folklore. And in the summer issue of Star*Line (but not free to read online), I have a bit of light verse, “An Astronomical Clerihew,” about how Mercury is a very weird planet.

There’s likely to be more coming this month, too, though I’m not positive of when . . .

Zilpha Keatley Snyder’s Green Sky Trilogy

Over the years I’ve picked up a few books by Zilpha Keatley Snyder that I remembered loving as a kid — specifically, The Egypt Game and The Velvet Room. But the one I kept wondering about was Below the Root and its sequels (And All Between and Until the Celebration), which form the Green Sky trilogy, and recently I found I could get them all in ebook from my library. So I did a binge!

And (like I did for the Seven Citadels quartet), I want to talk about whether they held up. In this case, though, the answer is “no, sort of, but not really, except for the bits that do.”

Be warned that Here Be Spoilers. Partly because I can’t talk about what does and doesn’t work here without getting into them, but also because honestly, you’ll see most of the twists coming three miles off. So it doesn’t feel like there’s much to spoil.

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Background first, and this is part of what does work. The setting here is indeed as imaginative as I remember: a world with low enough gravity that the Kindar (a human population) live high in giant trees and glide to lower levels in wing-suits called shubas. They eat a vegetarian diet of fruit, nuts, tree mushrooms, and so on; they make tools out of the hard, sharp beaks shed by local birds; they make furniture out of tendrils of the Wissenvine that can be easily shaped while living, then harden very rapidly when cut. Their books are embroidered on silk, with disposable texts being scratched onto large leaves. Young adults who haven’t yet bonded with a mate live in communal youth halls; it’s implied that they sleep around as they please, with contraceptive “youth wafers” keeping them from having kids until they want to. Their news is spread by newsingers who stand at major intersections along the branchpaths and cry out announcements to passers-by.

They also have psychic gifts of various sorts: pensing (telepathy), kiniporting (telekinesis), grunspreking (plant control), and others that have been lost for a long time. Even those main gifts are in decline; most children lose the ability long before they reach adulthood, though in the past even grown-ups retained them strongly enough to achieve great deeds.

It is an extremely hippie society. (The trilogy was published in the late ’70s.) Children go to Gardens for classes in topics like Love, Joy, and Peace. Their society doesn’t know violence; while obviously they understand that death exists, they don’t have the verb “kill,” and it’s shockingly vulgar for someone to say “I’ll dead you!” as a non-serious threat. They don’t have words for negative emotions like anger, either, except to say that someone is unjoyful.

The main fly in the ointment is the Pash-shan. The Kindar are terrified of the forest floor below, because horrible monsters exist below ground, trapped there by the magical Root of the Wissenvine which was — in a great act of grunspreking — grown across the entire surface of the planet to hold them back. Sometimes Kindar who fall or venture too low are never seen again, because the Pash-shan reach out through the Root to grab them and kill them.

. . . yeah. No prizes for guessing there are no Pash-shan: only a population of humans exiled there long ago by the leaders of the Kindar. The people who go missing are the ones who saw something down below they shouldn’t have, or asked too many questions; they get exiled below the Root by a secret cabal within the priestly class that rules the Kindar, the Ol-zhaan.

In fact, quite a few things about Kindar society are not as great as they initially seem. Their birthrate has been dropping for a long time now, and increasing numbers of Kindar are falling victim to a “wasting” that sounds a lot like major depressive disorder. They aren’t merely encouraged toward harmony and peace; showing negative emotion of any kind is shameful, even stigmatized. Unsurprisingly, they also have a growing problem with people getting addicted to the soporific berry of the Wissenvine. The Ol-zhaan enjoy a ton of luxuries and privileges ordinary Kindar don’t get, and new recruits undergo a year of being honored and feted all over before they start taking up their training — a maneuver one of the Ol-zhaan later notes is explicitly designed to make them enjoy being treated as special and above the rest of their people.

Meanwhile, below the Root, there are different problems. The Erdlings (what the Kindar call Pash-shan) have a booming population and insufficient food — in fact, I do think the worldbuilding falls apart a bit down there, though in pursuit of interesting goals. To make them contrast with the Kindar, Snyder has them reaching out through gaps in the Root (which is magically indestructible) to set traps for animals whose flesh they eat and whose skins they make into clothes. I’m not sure the caloric economy there works, but whatever. I’m even less sure it makes sense for them to be industrialized, with metal-working and coal-burning and railcars to reach the deeper mines, a monetary economy for goods and services, and so forth. But it does make them very different from the Kindar!

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What’s not so good here is the writing.

I don’t remember if I just gave more of a pass to the two books I re-read in previous years, or if Snyder’s writing genuinely is just worse here, but man is it not good. Possibly it’s because she was trying to reach for an elevated, High Fantasy kind of style, and instead landed on stiffness? (Though, in that ’70s way, this is revealed to actually be science fiction: the Kindar fled Earth for another planet to escape the wars there. Psionics totally count as SF instead of fantasy, doncha know.) It serves a worldbuilding purpose to have the Kindar speak of someone being “unjoyful,” but what do we gain by people engaging in their morning food-taking at the table-board? Just say they had breakfast at the table.

And there is so much repetition. Here is a direct quote from the dialogue: “I could only pense that the plans troubled D’ol Raamo. D’ol Raamo was very troubled about what they were planning to do.” That happens not only on a small scale from line to line, but on a large scale, too. Nearly the entire first half of the second book is basically a recap of the first book from different perspectives, with us wading through verbatim repetitions of dialogue, or a summary of scenes we’ve already read, or a summary of a different character reporting to somebody else about the scene they spied on.

This would be tedious enough if the first book had been jam-packed with action and we gained in richness by seeing other perspectives on those events, but . . . it really, really isn’t. I know we talk about Kids These Days having shorter attention spans and needing more action, but c’mon; in the time it takes Raamo to get to the plot, Nancy Drew would have had six thrilling encounters. The load-bearing events of the first book basically consists of: Raamo becomes Ol’zhaan, learns about the secret cabal, finds a child on the forest floor he thinks is a Kindar who escaped the Pash-shan, and learns she’s actually an Erdling. Better prose could have packed that into half the space, and left room for the events of the second book: two other characters find the way below the Root, bring back some Erdlings to try and convince the non-cabal Ol’zhaan to free them, and then when the bad guy threatens violence, everybody gets saved by a deus ex machina.

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But then there’s the third book.

I don’t think I ever read it as a kid. Possibly I did and jettisoned it from my brain, but I was vaguely surprised to see this was the Green Sky Trilogy, and the title of the third book wasn’t at all familiar. I also remember nothing that happens in it . . . which is funny, because in some ways I think it’s better.

On the level of execution, a lot of it still isn’t very good. There is a ton of summary narration, and any notion of there being a central character — already badly tattered after the hopscotching omniscience of the second book — basically goes out the window. Tons of complex stuff just gets nodded at, and there is so much complex stuff that there’s barely any sense of narrative momentum.

But that latter happens because Snyder actually does a decent job of exploring how “hey, everybody, the monsters of your nightmares are people like you, exiled because your priestly leadership has been lying to you about the past!” does not result in instant kumbaya. Both a faction of of that priestly leadership who don’t want to give up their status, and an Erdling faction that hates them for their oppression, hive off to become radical sects opposing the reintegration of the two populations. Kindar who have spent their entire lives terrified of the forest floor cannot bring themselves to go down and meet the Erdlings who are terrified of climbing the trees. Some Erdlings embrace Kindar ways, and get ostracized by their own people as a result. There are shortages of shubas and other things the Kindar economy is not equipped to distribute to all these new people. Kindar complain in horror about smoke (which they think is instantly poisonous) coming from Erdling cookfires and about the rough games Erdling children play, which might make somebody unjoyful. Erdling parents don’t want their children taught in Kindar Gardens, where they’ll learn to repress rather than express their emotions. The dying of the Wissenvine, and with it the soporific berries, results in people who want to avoid their feelings getting addicted to a much more dangerous hallucinogenic fruit instead. Etc.

And on top of all that, two very interesting threads of tension. One involves a “tool-of-violence” — a weapon, though nobody has the word for it — that is kept by the leader of the Ol-zhaan as a lesson about the past, and also because they can’t safely destroy it. (It seems to be some kind of handheld radiation weapon.) People are horrified by it, but also some of them want to use it to destroy the people they’re afraid of so they can . . . go back to their peaceful lives where they never have to worry about violence? It’s very plausible illogic.

The other, and my favorite, has to do with that deus ex machina ending in book two. The Spirit-gifts of the Kindar and Erdlings have been waning for a long time; the story indicates this is because of the separation in their society, not just between those two populations, but between Kindar (who know only vague stories about the past), Ol-zhaan (who know the truth of it), and that secret cabal (who know about the people exiled below the Root). Unity and community appear to be necessary for the flourishing of those powers. So, when a Kindar child and an Erdling child become friends and play psionic training games together, their powers strengthen, culminating in a display of “uniforce”: the gestalt power that worked so many wonders in the past.

In the third book this results in both societies idolizing that pair as “the holy children” who will save them all. Raamo — the central character of the first book, and himself a bit more Spirit-gifted than most Kindar teenagers — has vague premonitions of the future, and he keeps futilely warning people that it is not good to hang so much expectation and responsibility on two children. It’s bad for the kids, and it’s bad for the adults, too. A chunk of the third book revolves around both extremist factions wanting to get hold of the pair and maybe do violence against them.

But — and I actively liked this part — when the two girls vanish, it’s not because either group got them. In fact, horror at the belief that their leaders might indeed have done something bad to children costs both extremist factions most of their members; meanwhile, the girls ran away with the help of some friends and have simply been hiding out this whole time. Which on the one hand was really horrible for their parents, but on the other hand, it winds up teaching everybody an extremely salutary lesson about how it’s community, not Extra Special Privileged Leadership, that is going to save them all.

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So, yeah. Mixed bag. The worldbuilding is frequently interesting, the prose is frequently dire, the plot is lackadaisical at best, and there are some very legitimately thorny complications buried in a morass of summary narration. The Snyder estate will probably not authorize me to redo the entire thing from the ground up. I doubt I’ll feel the need to re-read them ever again, but it was — despite how often I was skim-reading — worth revisiting, for the memories and for what I’m pretty sure was entirely new to me.

New Worlds: Gold Rushes

I live in California — specifically in the San Francisco Bay Area, a place whose history is indelibly shaped by the gold rush of 1848. And, having proposed in last week’s essay a speculative path to industrialization involving the discovery of some kind of unobtanium, I find myself led naturally to the notion of a rush: a sudden influx of hopeful miners to the location of a newly discovered mineral deposit, seeking to make their fortunes in one fell swoop.

We hear about these mostly as gold rushes, but they can actually happen for other resources, too; there have been silver rushes and diamond rushes. So what elements are necessary to cause a rush?

First and most obviously, the object of the rush must be highly valuable. Nobody’s going to travel for months, often through rugged wilderness (because all the sites closer to home have already been claimed), to go after an ordinary resource like iron or coal. Or rather, they will, but not in the kind of sudden mass migration that leads us to call such an event a rush. If people don’t grow starry-eyed at the thought of getting their hands on some of that thing, it’s not fancy enough for this scenario. Think especially in terms of value versus volume: something that wows people when you hold it in the palm of your hand will have much more power to attract prospectors than something that requires an entire cartload to impress.

Second, it has to be (theoretically) easy to obtain. This is both a legal and a technological angle, with the legal part being the question of who owns the land where the resource is found. I suspect it’s no accident that, of the nine countries Wikipedia lists as having major gold rushes in the 19th century, eight of them were areas colonized by Europeans, with Greece as the sole outlier. In places like Australia, Venezuela, and the United States, a frontier mentality prevailed which facilitated the idea that any random guy could move in and start panning for gold. Try the same trick in England of the same era, and the landowner will have words and possibly bullets for you — not to mention the unlikelihood of finding major gold deposits not already under exploitation.

At least, easily accessible ones. This is the technological side of the equation: if extracting the resource requires sophisticated training and/or expensive equipment, then that’s going to limit active parties to the well funded, well organized operations. These days a lot of our mineral extraction involves digging up ore, sometimes from deep underground, and subjecting it to complex chemical and physical processes. It’s a far cry from some guy with a pan on the bank of a stream believing he might strike it rich.

And finally, people have to hear about it. This seems like an easy requirement to meet, but again, notice that “gold rush” is a phrase we associate with the nineteenth century. There are a handful from earlier — all of them in the context of Spanish and Portuguese colonization of the Americas — but the mass communication of newspapers and especially the electric telegraph made it vastly easier to spread the news widely, creating a large pool of hopeful prospectors willing to pack up their lives and go in search of fortune.

(You might think, by the way, that the accessibility of the location might matter. One look at the Klondike Gold Rush, however, puts paid to that notion. People were willing to risk freezing off their body parts, dying of starvation, being eaten by bears, or falling off a mountain to get to where there was gold. It certainly does help if it’s easier to get to, especially if there are ships or trains, but it’s not a requirement.)

That mass media thing, of course, cuts both ways. Whoever first discovers the resource probably doesn’t want anybody to know about it! Marshall and Sutter at Sutter’s Mill in 1848 wanted to keep their gold to themselves. Alas, despite oaths of secrecy, the guy they sent to secure mineral rights for their land blabbed the tale repeatedly along the way and failed in his mission to boot. Sutter not only didn’t get to keep the gold to himself, but lost all his workers to prospecting, his crops and cattle to squatters, and his entire dream of a profitable agricultural rancho there.

Of course, not everybody who rushes to a source of gold, silver, diamonds, or any other valuable material makes their fortune. In fact, the vast majority of them don’t. Advantage goes to those who get there first, as they stake out and deplete the best claims — which of course contributes to the feverish sense of urgency, people making snap decisions rather than thinking it through. Between the cost of getting there, the cost of equipment (which may not be specialized but is still an expense for the kind of poor man hoping to strike it rich), and the cost of supporting yourself and any allies or employees in the wilderness, most people start out in the hole. In the California Gold Rush, it’s estimated that a few lucky souls truly acquired a fortune, about half made a modest profit, and the rest lost their shirts.

Which is why the actual smart move — albeit the much less glamorous one — is to be the guy selling picks and shovels. It was less than two months after the discovery at Sutter’s Mill that Samuel Brannan bought every piece of prospecting equipment he could find and opened a store in the then-tiny town of San Francisco, so he could sell those things to the people he knew would come — knew in part because he was also one of the first people to publicize the discovery! (The story goes that he couldn’t put it in his newspaper because all his staff had run off, so instead he walked through the streets with a vial of gold, shouting about it to everyone who could hear.) Selling pans at seventy-five times the price he paid for them, he made out like a bandit and became enormously wealthy.

Selling picks and shovels is also a lot safer. Any time riches or the dream of them are at stake, you’re going to get people fighting over them, and a gold rush is no different. Claim-jumping is the act of starting to work on a site someone else has claimed as their own — usually not while they’re conducting active operations, but if they haven’t gotten to it yet or have decided it’s not as promising as another location, neither of which mean they’re ready to let you have it instead. Even when people respect those boundaries, any dispute is liable to escalate to fighting . . . and, of course, any pre-existing tensions are likely to be exacerbated by the tense conditions. Black, Latino, and Chinese miners — along with smaller numbers from other marginalized groups — faced particularly intense threats and bloodshed; it’s no accident that they were less likely to reap a profit than their white counterparts. Meanwhile, Native Americans were massacred by miners who wanted them out of the way.

This kind of thing is also environmentally disastrous, because the men (and much smaller number of women) chasing a vision of gold don’t care very much about anything else. Deforestation, soil runoff, and active pollution from toxic chemicals wreak havoc on the land and anybody relying on it for their survival. In just a few short years, this can transform not only the immediate landscape of the claims but anything downstream of them, and not for the better.

And all of these things could happen in a speculative world! Any planetary colonization scenario is ripe for it, so long as interstellar travel is available to the masses. Even something non-mineral, like the hunting of fantastical beasts could potentially look like a gold rush, if someone finds a critical use for their horns or hides or other body parts. As long as it’s local to a certain area, valuable, relatively easy to get, and advertised widely, the fever will take hold, and people will come.

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New Worlds: Industrialization

There’s a particular type of alternate history whose premise is: what if [fill in the blank past society] industrialized? (Rome is a particular magnet for this.)

The challenge of such speculation is that we have precisely one data point for what de novo industrialization looks like. Many parts of the world have industrialized, but they’ve done it by adopting the concepts and technologies developed elsewhere. As a result, our explanations for how it happens run the risk of being just-so stories, with no way to test them and see if they’re correct. Those being the only explanations we have, though, we pretty much have to go with them whenever we attempt to depict either an alternate historical industrialization, or this process happening in a secondary world.

But before we ask what it takes to industrialize, we should first look at what industrialization is.

I’m going to give a simple answer to this. An industrial society is one that’s figured out mechanized methods of production, rather than everything having to be done by hand. In order make that mechanization work, we had to harness new sources of energy — specifically, fossil fuels — and then reorganize labor around creating and operating the machines. As a consequence of such changes, a society of this type develops more specialized division of labor, and also tends to support higher, denser populations.

So: how do you get there from an agrarian society where muscles provide most of the power?

Obviously this is in large part a technological question. A Bronze Age society can’t industrialize for the simple reason that their metallurgy can’t support the kinds of technology necessary for powerful steam engines; hunter-gatherers, even less so. Even an iron-working society can’t necessarily manage it, because a boiler capable of surviving useful levels of pressure isn’t something any old blacksmith can bang together. But technology is only one side of the equation, and if all you’re looking at is the metallurgy, it’s easy to think that surely any place with good blacksmiths could figure it out — that it’s pure chance no other time period industrialized. In reality, you also have to ask yourself, what are we making these machines for?

Yes, aeolipiles — primitive steam turbines — existed nearly two thousand years before the Industrial Revolution got rolling. But they were essentially toys, producing very little power and using up tons of fuel to do it. They had no practical function. It took a completely different design to arrive at a steam engine that could do anything useful . . . and the odds that anybody was going to put in the work for that design were low, because what purpose would it serve?

When your vision of the Industrial Revolution is that change at its height, with massive engines driving locomotives or machines that fill whole rooms, you miss how inefficient, ineffective, and unreliable early steam engines were. Even if some Greek inventor tinkered around with the aeolipile or asked “I wonder if there’s a better approach?”, he would wind up spending tons of money and effort on making a device that still wasn’t worth it. The argument I’ve seen — the best just-so story we have for the Industrial Revolution — is that it started where it did and when it did because eighteenth-century Britain found itself in a situation where even a kind of crappy steam engine was better than no engine at all: coal was needed for heating purposes, their coal mines had gotten deep enough that they were flooding with water, and oh look, the fuel you need for the engine is right there where you’ll be using it. No need to pay for transporting it anywhere. The economics worked out to make that a problem worth solving with a new technological development.

Coal has been used for a long time in cooking and heating, but we’ve tended to go for the easy surface deposits first, and to switch away from it when those become less accessible. The roots of Britain’s industrialization probably lie in deforestation and the more intensive mining of coal in the century or two leading up to the development of actual steam engines — a set of circumstances that didn’t prevail in, say, Rome. They handled their mechanical problems with slave labor and had much less need for coal, living where they did; as near as I can tell, peninsular Italy had very little coal anyway (compared to Britain). So trying to invent a steam engine there would be a solution in search of a problem to solve: not a situation that favors the kind of technological development that has to pass through multiple not-very-effective stages before it gets to the good stuff.

And the good stuff, as you all probably learned in school, is steam engines that are smooth and efficient enough to be useful in textile production. Once you have those, it’s worth the cost to build them in places other than on top of coal mines and transport coal to them. Other uses, too, but after the water-pumping prologue, textile industrialization really is Act I of the Industrial Revolution, because it’s an easy place for a better (but still not amazing) engine to make a difference. So here, again, the just-so story says Britain was the right place at the right time: they had huge industries in both wool and (thanks to colonialism) cotton, meaning that productivity gains in something as basic as the spinning of thread could produce absolutely explosive growth. Everything after that — trains and steamships and cool steampunk gadgets — is flying on the momentum created by coal mining and thread.

Of course, all of this is the mundane path to industrialization. In a speculative world, it’s entirely possible to change the starting conditions and create a different trajectory; so long as it still follows the general pattern of “non-muscle energy source allows for new, mechanized, mass production,” it will feel industrial. If that energy source is the discovery of a vein of some mineral which, when a small quantity is placed into a device, becomes an abundant form of power, maybe nobody has to slowly iterate through crappy devices to reach a point where it makes economic sense to transport the stuff elsewhere. Or it’s a method of channeling magical power from the sky, recently discovered by an innovative sorcerer, which turns out to be useful for some productive task. (Quite possibly it’s still textiles: as noted in the previous essay, those are, alongside food, one of the basic survival requirements that have historically demanded the most time and labor.)

I’ll admit to ambivalent feelings about that latter example, because of what kind of magic I like in my stories. An industrialized form of magic is one that, by definition, can be depersonalized. At that point, no matter what words you attach to it, I no longer find it very magical: it’s just technology by a different name. I can still enjoy stories in such a setting; I’ll just enjoy them for reasons other than the magic. And I freely admit this is a personal opinion, not one shared by every reader. For worldbuilding purposes, it’s entirely fine to create a speculative twist on the process of industrialization — and then it helps to understand what does and does not make sense!

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My Lightspeed story is now free online!

I mentioned at the start of this month that I had a new flash story in Lightspeed; now it is free to read online! Or you can follow the same link to listen to it instead, narrated by Stefan Rudnicki. As the title implies, “I Cut Off a Monster’s Arm. AITA?” is modeled after the type of Reddit post where someone posts about an incident in their life, seeking reassurance that they’re not the one at fault in that situation (or sometimes confirmation that, yeah, they done screwed up). It’s also one of a small but possibly growing number of flash stories I’ve written based around Japanese yōkai tales — the third one will be out at the end of this month or the beginning of the next!

As usual, you can buy the entire issue of Lightspeed containing my story for $4.99, or subscribe for a whole year at $41.92. It’s great to be able to read things free online, but it’s also great for the magazines that publish them to be able to stay in business!

The Writer’s Little Books return!

"The Writer's Little Book of Naming: Tips and Tricks for People, Places, and Things" on a sepia background of names from many different languages and cultures

After a hiatus in which it wasn’t on sale anywhere, The Writer’s Little Book of Naming is now available once again! This is a micro guide to things you might think about while coming up with personal names, place names, and in-world terms for your fiction; it’s a deeper dive than my Patreon essays, in one neat little package.

And yes, this means there are more Writer’s Little Books coming! The Little Book of Platitudes, which takes on common saws of writing advice, will be out next month (you can pre-order it right now), and those two will be followed by new titles: Little Books on research, public reading, various poetic topics, and more. My goal is one a month for a while, though we’ll see how well I’m able to maintain that schedule in reality. It turns out there are a bunch of subjects upon which I have 8-10K words of stuff to say, which is too small for a book book, but excellent for a little focused ebook.

I’m part of the Strange Horizons fund drive issue!

Continuing the trend of June being the month of All The Things, I now have a new poem in Strange Horizons! They’re running their annual fundraising drive right now, and “The Dream of Jeannie” has been unlocked as part of the special fund drive issue — you can read it online right now!

This poem, I should note, is inspired by a piece of artwork by Pleasure Faith. It’s also of a type my fellow author and poet Mari Ness reminded me can be called a “calligram,” which is a much prettier term than the more usual “concrete poem.” (I also prefer “shaped poem” as a possibility.) This is where the lines of the poem are crafted so the overall layout forms an image; check out “The Dream of Jeannie” to see that at work!

New Worlds: Home Production

Given the surge in popularity of “tradwife” influencers these days, it seems an appropriate time to take a direct look at what it actually means for everything you need to be produced at home.

Starting with two basic facts: first, that essentially nobody has ever produced everything they need at home. And second, that the more you have to do so, the more your life sucks.

If you want an illustration of what I mean, check out the book Lost in the Taiga by Vasily Peskov. It’s a nonfiction account of the Lykov family, who fled religious persecution and spent fifty years living in almost total isolation in the Russian wilderness. By the time they started having regular contact with anyone outside their family, they were living the most horrifyingly marginal existence you can imagine: their house was a filthy, windowless lodge, they wore crude skins for clothing, and multiple family members (especially children) had died due to the almost complete lack of medicine. The weather itself had nearly killed them more than once when their crops failed, at one point necessitating the Lykovs taking turns keeping round-the-clock watch on their few surviving plants, to keep wild animals from destroying them.

And even then, the Lykovs weren’t fully self-sufficient. They depended on metal tools like their cooking pot which, if lost or destroyed, were completely irreplaceable. Yes, it’s possible to cook without metal vessels; yes, you could theoretically make stone tools if you didn’t have access to metal knives. But every such step toward self-sufficiency requires more labor, until every single hour in your day is devoted to the task of bare survival.

Granted, the Lykovs were not living in the most forgiving environment. But if you check out the stories of people who exited the “trad life,” you’ll find account after account of how much work they poured into living that way, until there was simply no time or energy left over for enjoying its supposed benefits. It’s an open secret at this point that the glossy, successful tradwives pulling in huge amounts of money from their work are showing a highly edited version of their existence, often involving armies of paid assistants — and/or their children, whose free time becomes a sacrifice on the altar of their mother’s career as an influencer.

Because that’s the first thing to know about home production as a system: everybody works. If you’re old enough to do some kind of simple task, like shelling peas, then you do it. Furthermore, you work nigh-constantly, because there is always more to do. The internet likes to pass around the claim that medieval Europeans worked less than moderns, but if you start to crunch the actual numbers, that doesn’t really hold up . . . especially when you consider the tendency to ignore women’s work. Even if a saint’s day or other religious festival meant the men weren’t going out to labor in the fields, the women still had to tend children, cook meals, clean up afterward, and probably spin thread while they watched the celebrations. Life will not go on hold just because it’s a special day.

But what do I mean when I say “home production”? It’s a fuzzy concept, but generally speaking, it refers to the idea that stuff is mostly made and used at home. You can also, of course, make stuff at home and then trade or sell it elsewhere; given how often houses doubled as workshops, it’s inevitable those two modes will overlap. And piecework, where someone gets paid per item they make, has gone hand-in-hand with home production for centuries, as a way for a household to bring in a little more money. Home production in the sense I mean it here, though, is about the idea of self-sufficiency: rather than buying things ready-made, you make them you and your family, for you and your family.

Measured by the time and effort invested, home production focuses almost entirely on food (including drink) and clothing, and neither one is fully seasonal. Winter still entails agricultural labor, and when it doesn’t, the men are probably working on making or repairing tools they’ll use when the weather warms up, or taking care of livestock. The women are busy turning the raw outputs into actual food, and the aforementioned spinning, which has to fill almost every moment it can if you’re to have enough thread to weave enough cloth to clothe everybody in the family. They might also make simple medicines at home, or crude furniture, or other necessities and minor luxuries, but those are a side note to the overwhelming demands of sustenance and shelter for the body.

And that’s still not the whole story, is it? Blacksmiths have been high on the list of necessary trades since we invented metalworking. (All right, since we invented iron-working. Apparently the proper term for someone who works bronze is a brownsmith!) Successful metalworking requires so much training and specialized knowledge, not to mention equipment, not to mention time, that nobody’s doing that and also being a full-time farmer. Pottery is much the same, because building and operating your own kiln is way too much to add atop everything else. Other things can be done at home, like milling grain, but they’re so labor-intensive that it’s vastly more efficient to have a specialist with the right tools do the job.

This is how “home production” turns out to be a spectrum. Yes, people used to produce most of what they needed at home — but not everything, and at the first opportunity, they started outsourcing certain tasks. If you could buy or trade for thread already spun (perhaps from a local poor spinster), you did; if you could buy or trade for cloth already woven, you did. You were, essentially, buying a respite from the endless labor that is the genuine trad life. Furthermore, specialization of labor is good for us as a society: a dedicated weaver can make finer cloth than someone who’s doing that in her spare time, and god knows a dedicated physician can know more about medicine than someone tossing a few herbs into tea and hoping that will do the job. When you don’t have to do everything yourself, you get better results.

But the belief that the traditional life was somehow purer and better isn’t entirely a new phenomenon. The transcendentalist philosophers of nineteenth century America, like Ralph Waldo Emerson and Henry David Thoreau, touted the benefits of “simple living” out in nature. In recent years the internet has given them something of an unfair shake; it’s true they weren’t entirely self-sufficient, but neither did they claim to be. (Thoreau in particular has become the target of “his mom did his laundry and brought him sandwiches!” We don’t actually know how his laundry got done, and he himself admits he regularly walked into town to dine with friends and family.) It is true, however, that they approached their vision of simplicity from a relatively privileged direction, and could therefore afford a great deal of assistance and modern convenience. Their lives would have been significantly more difficult if the innovations of the Industrial Revolution had not made things like the production of their clothing faster and cheaper than the womenfolk of their families could manage by hand.

The flip side, of course, is that there can be genuine satisfaction in making stuff yourself. Especially if your job feels very separated from material reality — you spend all your time on the computer moving words or numbers around, all to create something far removed from the physical product, or that never becomes a physical product at all — then sinking your hands into a mass of dough, or sewing your own skirt, or raising vegetables, or any of the other simple tasks of creation often feels rewarding all out of proportion to its necessity . . . or maybe rewarding because it isn’t necessary. It reconnects you with the fruits of your labor, and that can be very good for the brain.

So although I have a ton of issues with the entire “trad” movement (even before we get to the often reactionary politics behind it), I recognize and value some of the impulse there. And for writers, it’s worth not only acknowledging the ugly reality of what real self-sufficiency looks like, but understanding the conditions that make people nostalgic for the concept. I would wholeheartedly believe in a spacefaring civilization where anything can be printed from a replicator on the spot — and therefore has thriving communities of hobbyists who enjoy making stuff by hand instead.

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Stunt poem-ing

Some poetic forms very nearly amount to stunt writing, and I feel that a rhymed, iambic quatern double is one of them. But 1) the quatern double really suited my subject matter and 2) in the challenge/contest where I wrote it, someone else had done it rhymed and iambic, so of course I wanted to try and do the same thing. Continuing June’s flood of publications, “Horizon’s Child” is now out in 4LPH4NUM3R1C, and you can either listen to it podcasted, watch it on YouTube, or read the text online!

Books read, May 2026

Much less reading in May than in April. Partly that was because I was less in a mood for reading; partly it was because I started in on some longer, denser books that I didn’t get through before the end of the month. The latter in particular is why this post skews toward shorter, lighter reading . . .

The Antiquarian’s Object of Desire, India Holton. Third of the “Love’s Academic” series, and I’m glad to say this one felt stronger than its predecessor. It looks like I never posted about that one, so in brief: The Geographer’s Map to Romance suffered from a collision between its core trope (the romantic pair are in a marriage of convenience but estranged) and the series pattern of “the characters will spar a lot while secretly being into each other and also sure the other person doesn’t reciprocate their feelings.” In the first book that worked fine, because the leads were rivals in a contest and started out by thoroughly deceiving one another in pursuit of their goals; it therefore made sense that any signs of romance would fall under suspicion of being just another gambit. But in the second book, it required a degree of emotional stupidity on the part of the characters that I found more grating than charming.

In this third book, the trope is friends-to-lovers, which means the growing warmth between them can be interpreted in that light/suppressed because they don’t want to ruin the friendship. Meanwhile, the sparring is because the heroine’s job security will be threatened if she’s suspected of canoodling with a colleague, so they’ve agreed to fake-hate. This combination works much better than it did in the previous book. Meanwhile, though I found the magical plot to be slightly muddy in its execution, the ending was entertaining.

I think the series is complete here. Each book stands on its own, though (it’s a series in the romance model, where the volumes follow different characters), so you can skip the second one if you want. Me, I think I’ve had enough of this particular madcap flavor for a while; I overdose on it very easily.

Star*Line 49.2. I’ve gone ahead and joined the Science Fiction Poetry Association, which means I now have a subscription to their quarterly poetry journal. I don’t know that I have a ton to say about it, but poetry was a good match for my short attention span in May!

A Counterfeit Suitor, Darcie Wilde. Another of the Rosalind Thorne Regency mysteries. The mystery in this one did not pull together terribly well for me; there was never a point at which I felt the satisfying “click” of the pieces slotting into place, just “oh, okay, I guess that’s what’s going on.” The personal side was much better, with the heroine’s sordid family history rearing its head as a real threat to the life she’s built for herself.

At this point I am done with the official Rosalind Thorne series, but I’ve been told the Useful Woman series is a direct continuation under a different name. So if I want more of these, they’re available!

The Bishop’s Tale, Margaret Frazer. As mentioned before, I’m slightly sad that the last couple of books in this series have taken Frevisse out of her nunnery, because one of the things I enjoy here is the view into medieval religious life. However, the usual mystery series consideration applies: you can only have so many murders in one place! Especially when that place is supposed to be cloistered away from the world!

In this case the reason for the departure is very moving, though, and I liked the mystery. It was very obvious to me (as it probably is to many readers) just how the victim actually died — as opposed to what the characters initially think happened — but the “who” was less immediately obvious. It also built up to a moment of very effectively understated drama at the end.

The Fallow Year, Margaret Owen. Not actually a novel in the conventional sense, but at over 60K words I’m treating it like one. These are ten connected short stories Owen wrote (and posted to AO3) to cover the year that passes between the second and third books of the Little Thieves trilogy, and what goes on with Vanja and Emeric in that time. I sort of wish I’d known about these stories before I read Holy Terrors, because of course the key events here get described there. If you’re invested in the characters, though, it’s absolutely worth reading the mini-novel that explores those events in greater detail.

Platform Decay, Martha Wells. New Murderbot! Not my favorite Murderbot, though, I have to admit. It’s a perfectly fine extraction mission with good character moments, but at this point I find myself wanting a stronger feeling that some kind of metaplot is approaching culmination, and that’s just not what the series is here to do. Murderbot’s emotional growth continues, but the external events are much more self-contained, rather than building much on previous installments (though there is a little bit of the latter).

The Water Kingdom: A Secret History of China, Philip Ball, narr. Derek Perkins. This was one of the longer, denser things I started, and the only one I finished this month. I’m not sure audiobook was the best choice: though my familiarity with Chinese names is better than Malagasy ones (cf. last month’s post), it’s not so excellent that I didn’t occasionally lose track of details. Also, while I’m not qualified to judge Perkins’ pronunciation, I was irritated by the frequency with which his intonation and pacing announced THIS IS A CHINESE NAME — he has a tendency to put micro-pauses around them, in a way he doesn’t for European names. Possibly that’s meant to be an aid for listeners like me, but I found it grating.

The book itself, however, is great! Enough so that I bought a paper copy afterward so I can re-read the sections I’m the most interested in. Ball is comprehensive in his approach to the topic of “water in China”: it starts off with information about the hydrology of the region and what its rivers are like, then wanders through the role of water in Chinese philosophy, why it plays such an important practical and symbolic role in politics, historical and modern efforts to control it, how it factors into poetry and art — you name the angle, there’s probably a chapter for it. The result is very interesting both from a “learn more about China” perspective and a “learn more about rivers” perspective.

The Boy’s Tale, Margaret Frazer. Because these are such comfort reads, I ended up reading a second one this month. Yay, we’re back at the convent! I had a theory for who the killer was that I quite liked until circumstances pretty obviously spiked that theory, but it would have been in keeping with a pattern I’ve noticed with Frazer: the killer is rarely A Bad Person Who Deserves Their Punishment. Quite frequently it’s someone for whom you’re invited to have sympathy — which does mean that, despite these being comfort reads, I shouldn’t pack them too close together. The discovery of the culprit often comes with a side order of feeling bad for how everything fell out, even when I’m enjoying the story.

New Worlds: Transhumance

If your mental image of a shepherd is a person with a crook and a dozen sheep on a hillside above a farm, you need to scale up. And also, those sheep probably won’t be on the hillside for very long.

Transhumance is, admittedly, one of those topics where my knowledge is noticeably regional. I’m familiar with cattle ranching in the American West and, more globally, sheepherding — which I believe is similar to goats, both of them being caprines — but much less so with camels, and basically not at all with yaks or llamas or reindeer. I don’t even know if transhumance is a thing practiced with all those species! So take this with a grain of salt.

Having brought up the technical term: what is transhumance? (Not to be confused with transhumanism.) It is the practice of moving livestock between pastures, and in particular, the seasonal patterns thereof. On the extreme end, a herding society may be fully nomadic, packing up everyone and everything to move with the animals. On the nearer end, most people stay put, and only a small number of caretakers have to move around.

One way or another, though, the animals have to move. If you have a decent-sized pasture and just one cow you keep on hand for milking, she might be able to shift from spot to spot in the pasture, letting one area regrow while she grazes on another. As numbers increase, though, there’s no single pasture big enough, and keeping the herd in the same place will rapidly ensure they have nothing to eat. How large a herd you can support in how large an area will vary based on local conditions — good soil and regular rain will bring on faster, lusher growth than poor soil and aridity — but also, shifting pasture isn’t purely a matter of bare survival. Bringing your livestock to fresh grazing will improve the quality of their milk and, in the case of animals like sheep, the fineness of their wool. So the more a region is dedicated to animal husbandry rather than farming, the larger the herds will be and the more transhumance will shape the world around them.

So far, so dry and logistical. Let me take this out of the realm of theory and put it into a shape that might matter for a story: if you lived in Spain in, say, 1540, then twice a year you would watch two and a half million sheep go ambling down the roads.

Spain practiced seasonal transhumance, where livestock move between summer and winter pastures. Thanks to the geography of the peninsula, in summer the sheep lived in the cooler, wetter lands of Old Castile and León, and then in winter they were driven south to the fields and hills of Extremadura and Andalusia. This ensured they had fresh grass year-round, which contributed to the excellence of Spain’s wool industry.

Wasn’t that terribly disruptive to everybody in between those two regions? Hell yes, it was — and for those at the ends of the route, too. Farmers weren’t supposed to plow the pastureland or use it for crops, and as the political power of the Mesta (the association of livestock owners) grew, this led to them pushing for more territory, forcing farmers off their land. To prevent the sheep from trampling crops, there were dedicated rights-of-way for the sheep (called cañadas) that nobody was supposed to build on or cultivate, but of course farmers encroached on those boundaries. And since the sheep had to follow set routes and the people along them hated this disruption, anybody selling lodgings or food often set an extortionate price — which in turn meant the wealthier members of the Mesta, each with thousands of sheep, eventually squeezed out the smaller livestock owners.

Seasonal transhumance on that gobsmacking scale is fairly rare, but smaller versions of it are extremely common. In mountainous areas, the transition is vertical rather than north to south: in the winter livestock will live down in the valleys, then be driven up to the slopes when the weather warms. In these cases a small number of shepherds (or cowherds or goatherds — whatever terms is appropriate) go with them to herd the animals, and to protect them. Those herdsmen have to be tough, because they’re frequently living alone or in very small numbers, in rough accommodations, and vulnerable to all kinds of threats. Outlaws and poachers, mountain lions and wolves, all may have an interest in snacking on an isolated flock.

Doing all of this benefits enormously from assistance. We probably could not have herded large livestock in any meaningful quantities without first domesticating dogs, who can sprint about to keep a herd clumped together or chivvy a straying beast back into the flock. Dogs also double as a warning system and assistant guard against the threats mentioned above. The addition of horses again makes it easier for a small number of humans to control and direct a large number of animals. Cattle ranching on the scale it’s been practiced in the American West is essentially unthinkable without mounted cowboys, as the average herd driven from Texas to the Kansas railheads in the late nineteenth century was three thousand head.

What usually puts an end to this kind of thing is the growth of enclosure. That doesn’t always mean literal fencing (though it can); it just means that land is cut off from common use, reserving it only to the landowner and whatever they choose to do with it. Often there are valid reasons for enclosure, as tighter control over a piece of land means you can do things like complex crop rotations for higher productivity without worrying that somebody’s sheep will interfere . . . but it also generates a huge amount of resentment among those common people, sometimes to the point of outright rebellion.

And sometimes rebellion itself is the cause of transhumance decline. Wars make it hard to move livestock safely across large distances, and with the pattern broken, it may be difficult to get back. Or perhaps you’ve been raising sheep for fleeces, and something causes that market to crater, so it’s no longer worth the expense of moving them back and forth. Conversely, something like an epidemic or an extended dry period can cause transhumance to surge, as there’s no longer as much need for farmland or the soil is no longer as fertile for crops.

So this can be anything from a background detail in a political brangle, to a source of income for an innkeeper on a livestock migration route, to a major inconvenience for a character attempting to travel quickly down roads filled with sheep, to the reason why your lonely shepherd protagonist stumbles across an ancient evil awakening in the hills. (We’ve had plenty of innocent farmboys in the fantasy genre. It’s time for the shepherds to shine!) Just remembering that humans are rarely the only ones living in an area can make a difference to the story!

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A Sea Beyond prequel novelette!

June is going to be a busy month for me and publications — as in, I think I’m going to have SIX THINGS COMING OUT. (Followed by two more in July.) Two are out today, though one, the flash story “I Cut Off a Monster’s Arm. AITA?” in Lightspeed, is currently only available to subscribers; it will become free to read online on the 18th.

So the big news for today is “Non Plus Ultra,” a prequel novelette I wrote for the upcoming M.A. Carrick Sea Beyond duology! It’s free to read in Adventitious, and it tells the tale of how a sailor discovered the secret of passage to the Sea Beyond. I had a blast throwing all kinds of maritime weirdness into this one, along with the historical details that are the particular delight of writing this subgenre. Check it out!

New Worlds Theory Post: The Past Is a Foreign Country

Even if you work very, very hard with your worldbuilding, you may not be able to get readers to interpret it the way you want them to.

I’ve titled this essay “the past is a foreign country” because that’s a recognizable phrase (though few people know it’s from a book by the English novelist L. P. Hartley), and of course our worldbuilding often draws inspiration from the past — at least until we gain the ability to peer into the future. But I’m referring more broadly to the worlds we make, and the difficulty of translating fictional cultural differences effectively to your audience.

We touched on this a couple of months ago with the discussion of friendship, and how same-sex bonds could be expressed in astonishingly passionate terms compared to our models of friendship today. If you write that into a story now, you can insist all you like that it doesn’t imply anything more; some readers, maybe even most of them, are likely to find romantic and sexual overtones in it anyway. Those characters never sleep together? Maybe they’re asexual. They sleep with opposite-sex partners? Maybe they’re closeted or bi, and just not acting on those particular impulses. Especially since representations of queer desire have still not caught up with the straight kind, people open to those interpretations may have a hard time accepting that those two characters really are “just friends.”

The same can go for gendered behavior in general. I can say all I want — in keeping with cultural standards elsewhere and elsewhen — that crying is a perfectly masculine behavior, an expression of the powerful emotions felt by a properly manly heart. My modern Western readers will still have a hard time shaking the modern Western assumption that men should not shed more than perhaps a single stoic tear. If my heroic male character breaks out sobbing for anything other than the climactic death of a beloved character (and maybe even then), it’s going to carry a whiff of weakness, regardless of what standards prevail within the setting.

I’ve also talked about this in the context of beauty. We’re constantly bombarded with images and videos showing us the current ideal and marketing the notion that anything else is unattractive. Some forms of this, I suspect, are more amenable than others to worldbuilding in a different direction: if my story sings the praises of dark skin and beautiful clouds of hair, it’s clear that I’m pushing back against the white default (and I like to think my readers would be on board). It’s going to be a lot harder to make them understand why it’s appealing for people to black out their teeth, so their mouths look like empty holes. Even with all my anthropological training mustered to help me understand it, I look at photos of people with blackened teeth and see something that evokes a horror movie, not beauty.

Humor is notoriously difficult to translate from one culture to another. Now imagine making it up! This can be an effective way to signal cultural difference; if the alien ambassador laughs uproariously at seeing someone use a fork or tells a joke about that hilarious time his friend used the wrong meter in his poem, the reader receives that as evidence of very different behaviors and expectations. Much more difficult is establishing a variant framework of humor for your protagonist, where they find things funny that the reader does not share but is invited to empathize with. The best you can likely hope for is, through persistent effort, to establish what that framework is. Then, by the end of the story, the reader may recognize that what just happened will be considered funny — but that’s not the same thing as the reader laughing.

Or maybe what you’re going for is the opposite of funny, and your challenge is not so much making it register as making it feel real. If you read history — or, alas, if you encounter certain problems in the world today — you’ll eventually hit instances of bigotry that seem howlingly cartoonish. Whether they have to do with race, gender, class, religion, or any other point of difference, you can find instances of people saying things and committing acts that come across as absolutely and incomprehensibly inhuman.

You can put these in a story, of course. But I know authors who have written their own real-life experiences into their fiction . . . then have looked at the result, shaken their heads, and taken them out again. Because even when it’s reproduced directly from reality, the actual effect feels not real; it doesn’t produce the emotional result the author was going for. It winds up being distancing.

I particularly think about this in the context of writing war. Military campaigns of the past often included atrocities that, while they may be smaller than the Holocaust on a raw scale, were so pervasive and appalling that to put them on the page would seem like absurd, mustache-twirling villainy. Vlad the Impaler is said not merely to have impaled people, but to have gathered up three hundred Saxon boys and executed them either by that method or by burning, entirely because the leaders of the towns of their homeland were supporting his opponent in a civil war. And that’s just one example! The routine cruelty of such rulers is so over-the-top — and trust me, ol’ Vlad was hardly the only one or even the worst — that reading too much of it winds up numbing rather than horrifying.

What all of this means in practice is that sometimes the most important question is not “is this realistic?” but “is this effective for my story?” Is your reader likely to get the intended emotional effect from it, or are you better served by changing tactics and taking a different route to your point? Sometimes the answer will be that you want to stand your ground; you want to put that detail on the page, whether it’s inspired by a historical factoid or your own personal experience, even if it means the reader may not receive it as you intended. That’s a valid choice! At other times, you may decide that you prefer an alternative approach. You choose one instance of wartime horror to focus on in detail, rather than subjecting the reader to the full litany of atrocities. You pick at the edges of our current beauty standards or assumptions about masculinity, chipping away at cracks in that edifice rather than running at it headfirst.

. . . but maybe don’t try to invent an alternate framework of humor the reader is supposed to find funny. I know we’re writing speculative fiction, but some mountains might just be too steep to climb!

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